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The Heart

Author: SilentDreams42
Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38 /30 /42
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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emotions vary
but love grows... despite the heartache

we see it everyday

The Heart

The heart beats erratically
Crying out

Wanting you, who you are
Wanting me, who I could be

Doubts appear
Doubts subside

Loving you for who you are
Not who the world expects you to be

The heart beats erratically
Crying out…

In pain
In grief
In love

The heart beats erratically.

Submitted on 2009-05-03 00:38:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like how you repeat the first and last lines. The set-up is pretty rad too. Unique, but it gives the poem a special something.

However, the whole thing is a little cliché. I think... like... I have problems with cliché stuff too. Hahah.

I like the message behind the poem. It's sweet.

Overall, I like this piece.

<3 Sweets
| Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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