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Happy Feet


Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18 /60 /36
Words: 125
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1412
Average Vote:    4.6667
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Nothing amazing but nonetheless it's For a special someone.


Happy Feet



Through eternal slumber so divine,
As worlds freeze in place and time.
Embrace a state of conscience dreams,
Of midnight skies and starlit seams.
Angelic whispers intertwine,
Releasing doubts within my mind.
Tonight we reach past fear beyond,
And break free from heartaches immortal bonds.
As I close my eyes and hide shed tears,
Thanking my fate for putting you here.
We sleep in gratitudes sweet embrace,
As silent I love you's dance with grace.
With eulogic smiles upon my face,
As a past once haunting is now erased.
So rest well my angel and dream only of sweet,
Your my only penguin and I'm your happy feet.
Smile with joy baby, proud and true,
Because tonight I've come to realize that I love you.




Submitted on 2009-05-03 13:53:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  awwww!! i know i already commeted but i love this poem it is so cute!!! it makes me smile everytime i read it. im hella mad that no one else has commeted on it. its awesome and eveyone on this cite needs to read it. your girl is so lucky!! i wish my boy could write me something like this. love it!!! :)
| Posted on 2009-05-14 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]
  that was beautiful. whoever that was about is really lucky. it brought a smile to my face. i have nothing to say but, damn..that was really beautiful.
| Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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