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are you like me?

Author: joezwells
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are you like me?

have you ever felt like you cant speak?
do your thoughts overwhelm you
so much you cant find the answers you seek?
have you ever wanted something so bad
that it makes you feel sick
it pushes you down a path that you didnt pick
have you ever felt that you dont belong
that you are alone and everything is wrong?
have you ever tried to get away
pushed aside everything
but didnt realize the price you had to pay?
have you ever just cried
without knowing why
you tried to explain but it was all a lie?
have you ever pushed yourself so hard
you fell apart
couldnt figure out why you were dealt that card?
have you ever wondered if you had a purpose
searched for the answer
and realized you werent worth it?
have you lied in bed a night
wondering why things happened
and your future doesnt seem bright?
have you ever wondered if there was someone like you
who feels lost and like your whole world is coming ungled?
if you have you are just like me
feeling lost and anything but free
life is hard and gets you down
but it is whatever you make it out to be
so please dont be like me

Submitted on 2009-05-03 19:40:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow everything in this post someone can relate to at least one thing if not all of it! I think that always helps when people post things that others can relate to it helps the reader make a connection that otherwise wouldn't be there. Not that I don't like reading things I can't relate to but it just make it a bit better. Nevertheless this is a great write! Keep posting :)

| Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  This I totally get... it was wonderful... I've been there done that and i'm sure ithappens through out life... this is one of my favs
| Posted on 2009-05-31 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem has a nice flow and it forces the reader to think and analyse one's own life. Good writing, keep it up.
| Posted on 2009-05-19 00:00:00 | by devil666 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow I really liked this poem! I found that when I read this poem it teaches you a lesson but at the same time you can hear the feelings behind the lesson your teaching and that in itself is a very powerful thing. I also liked your structure and thought it flowed very nicely.
| Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

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