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    dots Submission Name: Paradigmdots
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    Author: Aria Aola
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 3/4/14
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I love life.


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    dotsParadigmdots
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    Naked upon the rocks of perilous thought
    I am lying, spread open by the scalpel of lust
    He thrusts deep, to explore my thoughts
    To purge my mind, to scour the open wound
    I bleed onto him deep thoughts of life
    And love and of the steep cliffs near the end.
    I welcome the end as he comes near me.
    Inside, I vacate the depths of my abdomen
    Seeking a lower refuge, I sputter out words
    of crimson and fire, burning for him.
    Indeed, Mikal had found the virulent vortex.
    My blood oozes forth.
    Bits of aborted dreams do follow.




    Submitted on 2009-05-04 00:43:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good.Really... it could have been longer but you have serious talent.could it be improved? I don`t think so. nothing distracted me from the piece.It was not unclear at all you.I like the way you write and I really wish you would write more.it does feel original.and it made me feel sexy:D haha!
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]


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