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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       this is for all the girls who said no and all the guys that didnt listen.


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    dotsFUCKHERdots
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    did you get off?
    was it worth it?
    do you want more?
    you wanna cum back, force open the door?
    were you satisfied?
    was it everything you hoped for?
    did you feel what you wanted?
    i know you were determined to finsh what you started
    i just need to know, what was it that turned you on?..

    was it my lifeless body?
    the way i stumbled across the floor?
    was it my slured speach, telling you no more?
    or was it the way i had no control?
    or the way i was trying so hard to run for the door?
    how about the way i kept pushing you and tell you i dont want anymore?
    how about the way you knew you were betraying your best friend?
    oh, i know, it must of been your wife running thru your head?

    with all that said
    i still dont know
    what the hell you thinking
    i fucking told you no!
    your a sick fuck
    and you will get what you deserve
    i hope your life is miserable
    your a fucking perve








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      i can relate... its a painful truth that is happens more and more with teens beginning to drink younger and younger not knowing how to handle their drinks. its sad these things happen. but i suppose what does not kill us only makes us stronger!!

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very emotionally written poem... it was really really good... sad and unfortunate for everyone who faces this situation... I almost felt like I was the girl... great job
    | Posted on 2009-05-31 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
      Am glad you got your emmotions out and are dealing with this unfortunate and [censored]ed up pain. I liked the poem a lot and loved the way you described your anger and pain. Love ya long time.
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
      it horrible when this happens and this poem is awesome...you gave me a chill...i can't say i know how you feel...because it's different for everyone...but i've been through this horse [censored] and if you ever need to talk i'm here...
    - ash
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sad. The really sad thing about it is that this thing happens everyday. I can't say that I enjoyed reading this, because it was a very sad poem, but it was written well. I don't think I would've changed anything.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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