It is great peace of work describing emotions and questions what appear in every human mind. Excellent work!
Only two words were strange willimg-willing?
and theyve? But i think they are just small typing errors.
good.Really... it could have been longer but you have serious talent.could it be improved? I don`t think so. nothing distracted me from the piece.It was not unclear at all you.I like the way you write and I really wish you would write more.it does feel original.