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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: schemingdevil22
    ASL Info:    19/female/Someplace
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 26/40/29
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    Bytes: 481



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    dotsWaitingdots
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    What do you do
    when you love someone
    and you dont know if they love you

    but you do know theyve got someone knew,
    and you're willimg to wait...
    if thats what it would take
    if only you knew

    cause once upon a time he did the same
    do you ask so you might not wait in vain...
    or stay silent
    in this the waiting game?




    Submitted on 2009-05-04 09:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really great. I agree it could've been longer, but it is good.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by SamiScream | [ Reply to This ]
      It is great peace of work describing emotions and questions what appear in every human mind. Excellent work!
    Only two words were strange willimg-willing?
    and theyve? But i think they are just small typing errors.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]
      good.Really... it could have been longer but you have serious talent.could it be improved? I don`t think so. nothing distracted me from the piece.It was not unclear at all you.I like the way you write and I really wish you would write more.it does feel original.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]


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