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Marietta


Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Marietta



A gentle wind
On the ocean floor
Memories of her
Keepsake with honor
A Peru woman
Scented botanical soul
An understudy with spirit
Dancing unforgettable
A performance she is
Nearly out of place
Portrait in motion
For the arts
Injured, I am
A ballet of love
Ending without our encore





Submitted on 2009-05-04 12:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Lovely read, it has a sultriness to it,

A Peru woman
Scented botanical soul
An understudy with spirit
Dancing unforgettable

I loved the vision these lines gave me. However, I was thinking more Salsa than ballet, lol.
| Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by jezracrow | [ Reply to This ]
  coool read,

great concepts...

botanical soul, ballet of love..

nice themes an what not..

keep writing
| Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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