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    dots Submission Name: She Liesdots
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    Author: Ashuri
    ASL Info:    15/f/the moon
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 13/37/17
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 103
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 921



    Description:
       Hmmmm I was bored, so I cranked this out. It's not quite the same as how I used to write, but I dunno...it's still not very good.


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    dotsShe Liesdots
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    She lies all the time,
    When she tells you...
    ...she's happy.

    She falsifies life,
    Rebels against your
    ...reality.

    It's all the same to her,
    A room, a box, a prison cell...

    Let her out she screams ,
    But you ignore her yell.

    Veiled and hidden ,
    You cower below.

    A shell be ridden.
    She takes your blows.

    Yet she still loves you...
    Do you know?...







    Submitted on 2009-05-04 20:31:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the deepness of this poem. It definitely can connect to a reader through the human level with the thing everyone recognizes, love, :D I enjoyed reading it for sure. Keep cranking out some more awesomeness!
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by silverpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it,

    best intentions and both parties signed away rights,
    by rights.... but and... it's both for both

    and that's kind of heartbreaking and the strongest feature of this is that it's honest, makes me want to read more.

    The close sewed it up nice and hollow and hopeful
    in a ruined kind of way.

    I dug it.

    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Commentary type thoughts:

    Thought of a marraige hall/ marraige life and how pathetic it is. More oriented towards a women's side of marraige life.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]



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