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    dots Submission Name: The sounddots
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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 54
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 512



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    dotsThe sounddots
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    Have you heard one sound?
    One simple but undetected?.
    I heard it everyday,
    yet yesterday I noticed it.
    This sound came near
    as I started to fall asleep.
    Silence for a moment
    and then the sound.
    Constant, rhythmic as clock
    heavy, low as heart beating.
    It came closer and closer
    and when it suddenly faded
    it still continued in my head.
    What is that sound,
    you ask?
    A sound...
    of undetected




    Submitted on 2009-05-05 11:29:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      um... okay!i liked it.it was very strange but awsum.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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