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    dots Submission Name: never saw you comingdots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    Elite Ratio:    2.61 - 218/287/297
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 95
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 619



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       hey im allowed to get mushy sometimes...*smiles sweetly.*


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    dotsnever saw you comingdots
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    i was fourteen
    when we frist met.
    my sister was attach to me
    connect at the hip.

    your blue sparkle
    i couldnt look at you
    my hands were shaking
    so was my heart too.

    i think i might of metion
    that cute dog you held
    your smile was twisted
    but fit you so well

    the next time i saw you
    i felt like the sky fell
    those blue eyes were smiling
    and i could tell

    the moment we kissed
    my heart was sent running.
    you were the first thing i saw
    that i never saw coming.




    Submitted on 2009-05-05 16:07:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw how weird you mentioned me in your love poem...See you this weekend baby sis.
    | Posted on 2009-05-07 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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