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    dots Submission Name: gravitydots
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    Author: Hecate
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 13/16/10
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 61
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsgravitydots
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    I saw you, once,
    inside the dusty glass of your bedroom window
    watching the rain as it fell, heavily,
    soft and emotionlessly, on the heads and on the shoulders
    of the passersby below.

    Pacing the rectangle of your apartment,
    you used to go on journeys round the world.
    Spun the globe up on the bookshelf
    and watched your fingers land.
    All your ten pale fingertips
    were thin moons
    pulled irrevocably by earth's gravity,
    doomed to fall.

    Outside, pedestrian
    pedestrians wandered in circles
    not knowing their place, perched precariously on
    the smooth-lined curving of a sphere
    every step bringing them back around
    to the beginning.

    In your apartment,
    peering through the window,
    you are acquainted with both the perils
    and the joys
    of gravity.
    The earth that held us close
    and far apart
    like stars, or angels,
    or death-defying comets.




    Submitted on 2009-05-05 16:46:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thoughts: there is something here that i am liking. indeed. the ending with it's stars and angels makes me feel a little icky, just because, well, stars and angels are well done and i like mine on the rare side. heavily, soft and emotionlessly is strange enough to allow me thinking room. are some of the lines maybe too long? maybe. i like this apartment, it's cozy enough. yes. there is something here...
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by milovelocity | [ Reply to This ]



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