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    dots Submission Name: My Gift To Youdots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 90
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 813



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    dotsMy Gift To Youdots
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    All I have is all I give
    With body mind and soul
    My breath, with my existence
    And my heart that you have stole
    All my love is yours alone
    For all the world to see
    All I have is yours my love
    For all eternity

    All I want is all I need
    With us walking hand in hand
    Talking, touching, having fun
    Our life would be so grand
    All I think are thoughts of you
    You never leave my mind
    All I want for evermore
    That our hearts remain entwined

    All I feel is all I see
    When I look into your eyes
    I see the meaning of true love
    And it makes me realise
    All I am is all I’ll be
    In everything I do
    All I feel within my soul
    This is my gift to you




    Submitted on 2009-05-05 18:39:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Exemplary love poem... "All I feel is all I see" (Frank) I really liked that line... Awesome
    | Posted on 2009-05-27 00:00:00 | by xxseluciousxx | [ Reply to This ]
      Outstanding love poem! A perfect poem for the one who is worth "giving all one has"!

    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the answer to "What Would He Give". And I knew it would be: you'd give your all.
    You've said it much more beautifully than that, though!
    Even though the perspective of each poem is different (he vs. I ) the essence is the same.
    The rhyme schemes are closely related, too. Although, I couldnt really judge precisely as rhyme is too much like math for me to fully grasp.
    Did you submit this after "What Would He Give" as a response? Or is this merely another masterwork in your favorite theme of love?
    It's an intriguing and enchanting pair of love poems, whatever your intent.
    Thanks for sharing them here.

    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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