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    dots Submission Name: Pretty woman.dots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
    Total Views: 917
    Average Vote:    3.3333
    Bytes: 1231



    Description:
       A pretty woman who invaded my dreams.


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    dotsPretty woman.dots
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    Flashes of lightning and sound of thunder,
    I see skulls and bones, I stare and wonder.
    No one around me, not even a soul in sight,
    No idea, what am I doing at this hour of night.

    I hear eerie wolfhowls and laughter of evil spirits,
    Couldn't see evil in physical form but I could feel it.
    Suddenly, I see a woman in black coming towards me,
    I pulled out my axe and hacked off her knees.

    Woman still walking,laughing, blood spurting from her mouth,
    My throat parched and choked, couldnt scream or even shout.
    Started running like my feet had grown bird like wings,
    Thorns in the woods hurt like multiple scorpion stings.

    Still ran like a maniac, wanted to save my bloody life,
    Vampire flying behind me, trying to pounce and bite,
    The same woman with no legs and bloodshot eyes,
    Felt like my dead foes attacking me in disguise.

    Ran till I reached a stable and stood against the wall,
    All off a sudden the wall started to crumble and fall.
    Ran but I was confronted by the woman with long nails and hair,
    I screamed out loudly in fright and then ended my nightmare.




    Submitted on 2009-05-06 08:52:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2009-05-07 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]
      you ever think about writing children's stories?
    acuzz that would be... awesome


    I pulled out my axe and hacked off her knees
    i dig that this isn't really comedy, but... that's the funniest [censored] i done read in a longity long long time yo.
    horror rap yup.
    nicely done young jedi.

    for serious.
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by milovelocity | [ Reply to This ]


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