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    dots Submission Name: in my arms...dots

    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsin my arms...dots

    i wish i could touch you
    hold you in my arms
    your already there
    but i don't feel the warmth
    i can't feel your love
    its been so long
    since i saw love in your eyes
    do you still want me
    at your side?
    or am i nothing
    just something to fill the void
    i feel you slipping away
    just out of reach
    gone to me
    just one last kiss
    a final demise
    sorry my love
    i can't go on
    pretending not to hurt
    losing you
    my worst fear
    but you've been dead
    for so long
    so here i sit
    on this rainy day
    missing us
    can't we just go back
    flip this hour glass upside down
    let the sands flow backwards
    so this won't faid
    hold me here
    on the brink of hell
    hold me tight
    till we become one
    and face the darkness
    unafraid and consumed
    in each others arms

    Submitted on 2009-05-06 09:51:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    been reading a few of your pieces. your poetry.
    seems to me that you're either longing for someone or just love that topic. maybe thats the one...
    sorry just kiddin.
    cant tell if you're talented or not, though you should try to rather let the reader feel what you mean (or feel) than to describe it so clearly. thus your poems would be really great i guess. since you're pretty prolific, why not give it a try?
    or simply try i out another topic. i'm wont to describe the mood i'm in even when i try not to write about it.
    sounds a lot better to me then. somehow.
    keep on writing, do what you think is best.
    i'll be around, reading.

    b-sides and sleep,
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by Jimi James | [ Reply to This ]

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