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    dots Submission Name: against my scarsdots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsagainst my scarsdots
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    your body pressed against mine
    nothing but skin on scars
    bumps and ridges
    how can you still be hard
    feeling deep inside me
    a smile, a tear
    i cringe at a glance
    of myself
    tattoos to cover slashes
    made in a failed attempt
    viens that hung limp and exposed
    it's been two years
    i have you thank
    as we lay here
    as one
    i final see the ink
    not what lies beneath
    thank you for this
    from head to toe
    looking like a zebra
    standing at the foot of the bed
    with nothing to hide behind
    and your still here




    Submitted on 2009-05-06 10:00:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Someone must love you to still stay when they see every single scar that you have. I'm not sure how someone could cut themself, because I'm sure that there's a better way to get over whatever's bothering you. I liked this poem though. Like, I think it is very sweet. I just hope that I meet that "special" someone that will still stay whenever they see everything I have to offer.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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