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mother dearest

Author: joezwells
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mother dearest

i remeber when i was little, i would never let you go

all i knew was i needed you, and on my face it showed

evertime you walked away, my tears would start to flow

all i knew is i needed you, and i didn't want you to go

i remeber when i was a teenager, i didnt want you by my side

all i knew is you wouldnt accept me, and our relationship had died

everytime you got to close i would always run and hide.

all i knew is i still needed you, i wanted you by my side

i remember as i got older, i just kept pushing you away

all knew is I dissapointed you, and i knew this everyday

everytime you asked me why, it dawned on me the price i had to pay

all i knew is i needed you, i just couldnt find the words to say

i remember when i finally i asked, you held me tight and said it would be okay

after all the years of shutting you ourt, you took my hand and showed me the way

after all is said and done, i found our relationship is to big of a price to pay

i have always loved you, and today i finally found the words to say

mom i need you in life to help me find my way
i know that i wrong , yet you never pushed me away.
i need you more than anything
and i love you more each day

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  this was so honest... i feel like that about my dad... once again bravo i love it.... keep it up so far i relate the most to your stuff... :}
| Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow thats lovely i bet your mum really appreciates it...i know my mum made mistakes and i know that as a mum ive made mistakes is so easy at different stages for a distance to gather and i know as a mum i try hard to close the gap but at times it is no easy task...well sounds like you have grown up alot..a young adult not an older child :)).. It is really different when you can start to have an adult relationship with your parents and see them as people...
| Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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