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    dots Submission Name: If your soul was a pitcher...dots
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    Author: coloredstone
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    dotsIf your soul was a pitcher...dots
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    There’s nothing that holds as many secrets

    As a human soul…

    Just imagine

    if your soul was a pitcher

    what would it pour?

    What would you do if your life could talk

    And tell your story

    like a chapter from a history?

    lives don't lie like you and me

    what would your life say to you

    if it could speak?

    What if your talking life appeared before you

    and everyone you know

    and everyone you don’t

    and before your Lord?

    You knew He knew,

    but somehow you didn’t really think…

    My friend, just because life isn't talking to you right now

    doesn’t mean it never will.




    Submitted on 2009-05-07 07:54:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this. I thought about that, and if my life was the water in the pitcher, I guess I would swallow it all as fast as I could so nobody can see it... if it were the pitcher itself? Put it in a box and bury it, I suppose. I think I must be here waiting on the next one. This one? It's become like some rest stop along the way.

    I think this was creative... If I were easily inspired, I would say inspirational even... it's not a word I use often, but I can see where it would apply. Nice.
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      hey guess what i learned yesterday. man inherently forgets, we get from our father. so we forget about the last baseball game, so treatment for that is to be with ppl who remind of the baseball game.

    nice write stone.
    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah. Wonderful, though i do agree a tad bit with Keiran. you should add a little ambiguity. but i still love it.

    It scares to think of what life will say. someimes we do and say things that we dont mean and then just try to forget it, but life doesnt forget it.

    "My friend, just because life isn't talking to you right now

    doesn’t mean it never will. "

    I love it when people put the whole "my friend".

    Fana
    | Posted on 2009-05-08 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll be honest, I didn't like it. BUT, before you ignore me, let me clarify.

    I liked the meaning, I liked what you were trying to say, I just didn't like how you said it.

    It's too clear, you can't just come out and say things in poetry! Well, sometimes you can pull it off, but mostly, it's better to use metaphor, allegory, or another fitting literary tool. Hide the meaning/idea/emotion/message in something else.

    So, maybe try again with this piece, and express the idea with less words, more images, more emotions, more subtlety.
    | Posted on 2009-05-08 00:00:00 | by Keiran | [ Reply to This ]


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