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    dots Submission Name: BEAUTIFUL STRANGERdots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1396



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    dotsBEAUTIFUL STRANGERdots
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    BEAUTIFUL YOUNG FACE WITH INOCENT EYES,
    WAS SHE A SEDUCTRESS OR ANGEL IN DISGUISE?
    JET BLACK HAIR WITH A CREAMY WHITE COMPLEXION,
    ONE LOOK AT HER AND IT WAS ALL LOVE AND AFFECTION.

    BEAUTIFUL ROUND BREASTS LIKE CUPS OF NECTAR,
    SHE CAME CLOSE TO ME, NOW I COULD SEE HER BETTER.
    WAITING FOR HER STOP, HER FACE HAD NO EMOTION,
    WISHED THE TRAIN MOVED IN SUPERSLOW MOTION.

    SLIM WAIST AND LOVELY GREEN EYES LIKE EMERALDS,
    COULDNT SAY A THING, I WANTED TO SAY SEVERAL.
    MY HEARTBEATS NOW LIKE A GIANT AFRICAN DRUM,
    IF ONLY SHE COULD PLACE HER HAND AND FEEL SOME.

    CREAMY WHITE NECK, ELEGANT LIKE A FLAMINGO,
    CELESTIAL LIGHT FROM HER BODY, I WATCHED HER GLOW.
    WISH COULD FEEL HER VELVETTY, SOFT LIPS ON MINE,
    PAYING HOMAGE TO HER BEAUTY LIKE IT WERE A SHRINE.

    WANTED TO KISS HER WHOLE BODY TILL THE END OF AGES,
    BEAUTY SO DIVINE, COULD WRITE MILLION VERSES AND PAGES.
    WOULD BE LOVELY TO HAVE LITTLE KIDS WITH THAT ANGEL,
    I'M IN A TRANCE AND SHE'S TAKING OVER MY BRAIN CELLS.

    THE TRAIN STOPPED AND SHE STEPPED OUT WITH GRACE,
    WANTED TO STOP HER AND LOCK HER IN A TIGHT EMBRACE.
    BUT REALIZED IT WASNT THE RIGHT TIME AND PLACE.
    CANT EVER FORGET HER, ITS BEEN A THOUSAND DAYS.






    Submitted on 2009-05-07 08:03:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very awesome rhyming and writing, i wish it was mine, it was very cute!
    | Posted on 2009-05-07 00:00:00 | by vLame | [ Reply to This ]
      a thousand days in reverse would take me back.
    another chance for words while riding the track.
    to speak what i think and have thought since then.
    how different the trip if i could take it again?
    | Posted on 2009-05-07 00:00:00 | by milovelocity | [ Reply to This ]


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