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I wrote this poem in 2005, I never posted it, well here it goes, enjoy!
Full of life the globe subsists
It is silent yet alive.
All deceased will exist
A different form revived.
Vanished verve to an end
Earth void of days.
Strife’s, struggles, apprehend
Change in different ways.
Several concerns we have to face
Earth's conditions and our own.
From all encounters in disgrace
Mother Earth left alone.
To a halt deceased exist
Earth forget us never.
For on this globe our souls subsist
Everlastingly and forever.
Submitted on 2009-05-07 13:06:54
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i wonder why no comments on this..
a bit awkward...in a few lines..as far as rhythm...
but some really good images in this...and i see a theme of the end of the world...or at least of us...
god's plan as written up by man..yes, the bible written by human hand...how much can we believe?
and in the end...when we are swallowed by ice or fire or whatever...the earth will go on..will still exist...
maybe everything will start over...maybe it needs to..
i find a lot to like here...first line is uncomfortable grammatically...shouldn't it be "globes subsist" or "globe subsists"
we better be ready either way.
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