Souls Subsist

Author: SavedDragon Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303 /258 /86 Words: 82

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Souls Subsist

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Full of life the globe subsists It is silent yet alive All deceased will exist A different form revived Vanished verve to an end Earth void of days Strife's, struggles, apprehend Change in different ways Several concerns we have to face Earth's conditions and our own From all encounters in disgrace Mother Earth left alone To a halt deceased exist Earth forget us never. For on this globe our souls subsist Everlastingly and forever

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i wonder why no comments on this.. a bit awkward...in a few lines..as far as rhythm... but some really good images in this...and i see a theme of the end of the world...or at least of us... god's plan as written up by man..yes, the bible written by human hand...how much can we believe? and in the end...when we are swallowed by ice or fire or whatever...the earth will go on..will still exist... maybe everything will start over...maybe it needs to.. i find a lot to like here...first line is uncomfortable grammatically...shouldn't it be "globes subsist" or "globe subsists" we better be ready either way.

| Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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