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    dots Submission Name: Souls Subsistdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/83
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this poem in 2005, I never posted it, well here it goes, enjoy!


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    dotsSouls Subsistdots
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    Full of life the globe subsists
    It is silent yet alive

    All deceased will exist
    A different form revived

    Vanished verve to an end
    Earth void of days

    Strife's, struggles, apprehend
    Change in different ways

    Several concerns we have to face
    Earth's conditions and our own

    From all encounters in disgrace
    Mother Earth left alone

    To a halt deceased exist
    Earth forget us never.

    For on this globe our souls subsist
    Everlastingly and forever




    Submitted on 2009-05-07 13:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i wonder why no comments on this..

    a bit awkward...in a few lines..as far as rhythm...

    but some really good images in this...and i see a theme of the end of the world...or at least of us...

    god's plan as written up by man..yes, the bible written by human hand...how much can we believe?

    and in the end...when we are swallowed by ice or fire or whatever...the earth will go on..will still exist...

    maybe everything will start over...maybe it needs to..

    i find a lot to like here...first line is uncomfortable grammatically...shouldn't it be "globes subsist" or "globe subsists"

    we better be ready either way.
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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