[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Wash me awaydots

    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 818
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 908

       this is not originally what i was going to write i guess my feelings just needed to be realsed more than what i wanted to do

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWash me awaydots

    Wash me away into the sky
    So i may die
    In the clear crisp blue of space
    The fluffy white clouds promise
    Feel the sting of tickling tease
    of a breeze
    that blew right through me

    Wash me away in a summers rain
    So i may melt
    To feed the seeds
    Of natures calling me back
    I am still
    In the shrill of her sight
    The rain in letting
    Losing life

    Wash me today
    A tub filled of tears
    This festering thought won't get off
    It just smears
    My skin is so dirty
    I must take it off
    Attempt a quick shave
    But somebody sees me
    I stop

    Wash these cries
    From my eyes
    Hold me close
    I will die
    For i'll get it right one
    of these times
    In the end
    I will be washed away.

    Submitted on 2009-05-07 14:41:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]