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    dots Submission Name: The no-more villagedots
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    Author: wizardmaster
    ASL Info:    2314/girl/China
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 7/7/21
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Bytes: 709



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    dotsThe no-more villagedots
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    I look down at the destroyed village,
    what used to be an active village,
    for children and their family.

    I look down at the village,
    That burned in fire.
    The burned fields,
    And run down homes.

    I look down at the Village,
    and see the
    surviving people
    scurrying in confusion.

    I look down at the destroyed village,
    and wonder
    what will become of it now?

    I look down at the destroyed village,
    that used to be my one,
    and only home.

    I look down at the destroyed village
    for the last time,
    and walked away
    for the last time.




    Submitted on 2009-05-07 16:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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