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    dots Submission Name: Out of Tunedots
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    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsOut of Tunedots
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    That last note lingers in the air
    As I look up from my guitar
    To see an empty room
    Apparently I was out of tune

    With you, but
    Still in time
    Because someone else kept the beat
    With just their feet

    This is just another tedious day
    As we make our way
    Across the land
    In search of God knows what

    Just another wasted night
    Singing to ourselves
    Tunes we only vaguely feel
    Anymore





    Submitted on 2009-05-08 03:18:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is actually a decent enough poem, but I thought you tacked anymore on to the ending.

    still good though.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-05-08 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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