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    dots Submission Name: Misunderstanddots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 417
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1749



    Description:
       This was inspired on a big part by a person I care about struggling with keeping her loved one who may be becoming eternally ill. Both of these people are very close to me and it just puts my situation in perspective, how lucky I am to be alone because she left and not because of death... I'll be praying for both of these people.


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    dotsMisunderstanddots
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    Well we had a good run
    Filled with memories to last
    And now it's winded down
    And all memories are the past

    But just because you're not here
    Just because you're gone
    It doesn't really matter
    But don't get me wrong

    I wish you were here
    I miss seeing your smile
    I miss feeling your warmth
    I've missed it for awhile

    But just because you don't want me
    Without me you're now complete
    It doesn't really matter
    I can't sweep you off your feet

    But don't get me wrong
    I'd like nothing more to do
    Than take you in, be together
    And then run away with you

    But just because you're happy
    You don't love me anymore
    I don't feel mistreated
    I no longer feel torn

    I'm happy you're doing well
    But don't get me wrong
    I'd be happier with you here
    You've been gone for so long

    But just because you gave up
    You aren't trying anymore
    You're still trying for something
    I'm not what you're looking for

    And I'm just happy you're healthy
    And I hope you smile from time to time
    But don't get me wrong
    I still miss the times you were mine

    But just because you're gone
    You live so far away
    You're still close in my heart
    On my mind every day

    And I'm just happy to have all
    Memories so strong
    I still love want and miss you
    But don't get me wrong




    Submitted on 2009-05-08 05:39:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      To be honest some of the lines were iffy to me, but believe it is an honest heart-felt piece of writing you spent time on, so I wont knock it at all.

    Some parts are actually kind of harrowing, its a shame I couldnt appreciate the whole thing, but still good job.

    Hope things turn out okay!

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-05-08 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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