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    dots Submission Name: THIS ONES FOR YOU!dots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 861



    Description:
       this is about a very close friend of mine who hasnt had the best relationships in the past. im trying to tell her to finally step up and take what she wants out of a relationship becuase she is so sweet she gives too much. step up girl take control of this one you know you can!


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    dotsTHIS ONES FOR YOU!dots
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    stop! your letting him do this
    think you owe him? it was just a kiss
    dont give in, he will realize what he missed
    dont over look facts that cant be dismissed

    you want this to work
    but dont give up who you are
    he has his opinion
    but he can only take it so far
    has he forgotten that fisrt night
    you ended up in the back of his car

    no judgment on you
    but does he have a clue
    obviously your drinking impairs you
    so one drunk kiss makes him come unglued
    he is the one who made the mistake...he already knew

    you take the upper hand
    your strong enough to do so
    if he doesnt listen his ass is canned
    you know what you want and know how to get it
    you owe it to yourself to finally take a stand





    Submitted on 2009-05-08 12:18:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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