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    dots Submission Name: things i meant to say on grad daydots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Nostalgia
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    dotsthings i meant to say on grad daydots
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    I may never see you again, so i wanted to share the things i learned so you can keep your head up

    -stay strong--
    -keep your senses-
    -keep your mind active on positive things--
    it's okay to regret the past, but never okay to regret the future--
    --simply saying nothing means you support an act even if you don't--
    --gaurd your affections, the are the only things you have of your own--
    --and knowing you was better than fried chicken, collards, mac and cheese, cornbread, and sweet potatoes with the marshmallows on top--




    Submitted on 2009-05-08 12:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You could tidy this up, fix a few spelling errors, but generally and more importantly this was touching without being sappy, and I got the feeling/image of this girl and you spent hours together that passed too quickly, the way you can sometimes look back and love it for what it was and yet wish you'd made more of it.

    So it's sort of like consoling the girl and letting her know how much she meant. The change in tone at the end was delicious.

    I liked it.

    You could refine it, make it more, but it's good just now too.
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      you gradjitated? awsum dude, cognradutations!
    potty like a rok starr!
    i'm hungry.
    | Posted on 2009-05-09 00:00:00 | by milovelocity | [ Reply to This ]


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