This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: joezwells
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64 /79 /55
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1089
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 471


i dont know what to title this one!


step outside
can you see whats there?
take it all in
listen to the wind

raindrops fall
trickle through the tress
fill up bird baths
end up in the seas

the sun shines through
heats up the earth
shines in windows
and fertilizes the turf

the night slowly settles
dark leaks through the sky
stars start to sparkle
as the day slowly dies

Submitted on 2009-05-08 18:21:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  I like the descriptiveness (is that a word lol) of this piece although i have to agree i am not sure of what the piece is portraying apart from the beauty of nature..perhaps it could be called Natures Day...i also feel you could add more...just my thoughts..
| Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  I know you have a question mark on this poem I am guessing because you have no idea why you wrote it, but I enjoyed reading this poem although I'm not sure the meaning of it lol which is probably another reason for the ???marks anyways it made sense and it flowed well together so thats always a plus (: love ya long time
| Posted on 2009-05-10 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?