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    dots Submission Name: Faze of make updots
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    Author: D-Ink
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       just a poetry on excessive makeup. not intended to anyone. :)


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    dotsFaze of make updots
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    Caught up with the faze...
    of dolling up your face.

    Hands poised, mouths slightly open
    carefully...bringing color to your face.

    Never mind the time, the payment you faced...
    the effect, my GOSH, wonderful yet plastic all in the same page.

    Blusher, concealer, lip gloss...
    Just don't forget there's teeth to be flossed.
    (you kept saying that!)

    The confidence you have
    backed up by the globs you slap on

    Was overpowering...
    to the point I have to shut you down in shame.

    As I watch you grow beautiful day by day
    a treat for the eyes, the hunger in me ...

    Was strangely lost, as the girl I once knew...
    too, was lost, buried deep in a heap of

    powderish goop.




    Submitted on 2009-05-09 09:58:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, so relevant and true! Almost satirical, but so seriously true indeed. I know of many girls with this mentality. And I say girls, for women are much different and contain that responsibility and sense of inner self integrity to be responsible with such resources!
    Make up is an art that I fully respect, but within its limits. These generations upcoming seem to put shame to it, as you describe.

    Well written, and best wishes!

    ~Vincent
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this.
    | Posted on 2009-05-13 00:00:00 | by SamiScream | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, it immediately reminded me of the piece I posted, "your smile and you"... Check it out if you get a chance, this really made me smile. Almost made me feel as though we wrote about the same person!
    | Posted on 2009-05-09 00:00:00 | by overthinker | [ Reply to This ]
      very funny.. nice!!
    | Posted on 2009-05-09 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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