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    dots Submission Name: A prayerdots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA prayerdots

    Excavate me oh Lord
    Help me brush away the dirt
    from the treasures of my soul.
    Take me out of darkness
    into your all pervading light.
    Such a glorius sight that,
    would it be if I could bear
    to cast mine own eyes
    upon my whole Self
    without going blind.

    Thou Great Archeologist
    Blow your gentle breath
    across my soul
    and reveal me to myself
    (but only when you deem me ready)
    I shall live here
    cultivating my patience and trust
    and knowing that that which I ask
    if it fall in line with your will
    be done.
    Help me to embrace each moment
    as you bring it to me.

    Oh Great Archeologist
    Excavate me
    so that I may see Your shining glory
    within myself
    within my Self.


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      Good prayer, but as all good armchair quarterbacks, I have a criticism. The poem, as deep and profound as it is, almost sounds to me that you are in love with your God. I understand loving the Lord, but toward the end it almost seemed sultry and submissive. If that was the point then disregard.
    | Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]

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