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    dots Submission Name: Lovers Lovelydots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/624
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 792



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    dotsLovers Lovelydots
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    You only got me because the pretty girls were taken
    And when you said you needed me
    I thought maybe you were faking

    I thought you could walk on water
    But you were just a bit too naughty
    You're a master of doors and holy floors
    And I don't know what else you're good for

    And maybe we're perfect, maybe we are lovers lovely
    Or maybe we re just pretty
    Just good looking enough to see

    Badadadadadadadabadadada
    Christen me a new believer
    I fall on deaf ears telling new stories
    They just aren't ready

    And maybe we are just perfect, maybe we are lovers lovely
    Or maybe we're just pretty
    And that means mostly nothing




    Submitted on 2009-05-10 01:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "You only got me because the pretty girls were taken"

    I expected much more from this with such a beginning. :) The poem still needs some work to be done. I think you should start by expanding the short lines. It will not only make it read better but maybe add some weight to the poem.

    | Posted on 2009-05-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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