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    dots Submission Name: Where love has gone?dots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 408
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhere love has gone?dots
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    IM IN MY BEDROOM FEELING SO LAZY,
    THINKING ABOUT MY PRETTY LADY.
    HER FACE SO BRIGHT AND SO GORGEOUS,
    IM LOVE AND ITS SO SO OBVIOUS.

    INVADING MY THOUGHTS WITHOUT PERMISSION.
    SEE HER ALL AROUND, SHE'S CLOUDING MY VISION.
    IM LOSING MY MIND AND GOING INSANE,
    ALL MY ATTEMPTS TO SLEEP ARE IN VAIN.

    LAYING IN THE BED WITH MY EYES OPEN,
    SEEDS OF LOVE EXCHANGED LIKE POLLEN.
    KNOWN HER FOR A MONTH OR SO, NOT MORE,
    IF THIS IS THE BEGINNING, WHATS IN FOR STORE?

    HELD HER HAND, SHE BLUSHED LIKE A TEENAGER,
    TOLD HER I LOVE HER, I PUT IT ALL ON PAPER.
    SHE TOLD ME" I NEED SOME MORE TIME"
    I SAID TO MYSELF "I THOUGHT YOU WERE ALREADY MINE"

    NOW IN THE BED AGAIN SHEDDING TEARS,
    EATING SHITLOADS OF CHIPS AND DRINKING BEER.
    I THOUGHT SHE'D GIVE MY LIFE A NEW MEANING,
    BUT NOW I THINK SHE'S PLAYING WITH MY FEELINGS.

    HEART LIKE A BASKETBALL BOUNCING UP AND DOWN,
    MISSED HER LIKE HELL WHEN SHE WAS OUT OF TOWN.
    CALLED HER PHONE AND SHE SAID "WHATS NEW?"
    I TOLD HER I LOVE HER, THATS ALL I KNEW.

    HAD TO TAKE IT SLOW AND NOT SO FAST,
    BUT LIFE ISNT SIMPLE LIKE ALGEBRA & MATH.
    HER HAIR LIKE SILK AND SKIN SOFT LIKE VELVET
    SHE CAST A SPELL ON ME, NOW I WAS SO HELPLESS.

    PRAISE WENT TO HER HEAD, SHE IGNORED MY FEELINGS,
    I CAME DOWN ON MY KNEES CRYING AND PLEADING.
    TURNED HER FACE AWAY AND PAID NO ATTENTION,
    MY HEART ACHED CUZ I COULDN'T TAKE THE REJECTION.

    SHE SAID " I DONT DENY IT THAT WE HAVE THIS CHEMISTRY"
    BUT HER RUDE BEHAVIOUR WAS PAINFUL LIKE DENTISTRY.
    IGNORED HER AND STOPPED ALL CONVERSATION,
    AFTER ALL THAT AGONY, I FELT LIKE A CANCER PATIENT.

    MY PEN AND PAD NOW WAS THE CHEMOTHERAPY,
    PANGS OF SEPERATION WERE DRAINING MY ENERGY.
    WANTED TO HUG HER BUT RESTRAINED MYSELF,
    CRYING ALL ALONE, I FELT I WAS BURNING IN HELL.

    LOOKING AT ME SADLY WITH HER BIG BROWN EYES,
    HAD HER OPPURTUNITY, NOW SHE'S PAYING THE PRICE.
    ALWAYS WAS I KIND, LOVING AND CARING,
    BUT FELT I WAS THE ONLY ONE YEARNING.

    HER PHONE NUMBER THOUGH STILL IN MY MEMORY,
    DONT KNOW IF SHE STILL REMEMBERS ME.
    ALL SHE IS NOW IS A SAD CHAPTER IN MY LIFE,
    UNHAPPILY MARRIED, SHE'S SOMEONE ELSE'S BRIDE.




    Submitted on 2009-05-10 04:58:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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