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andato


Author: save me
ASL Info:    19/F
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Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
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andato



i feel you in every vein of my body,
every pulse slowly fading away.
running through my blood, keeping me warm.
everything dies one day though,
the touch of skin, soon cold.
fingertips dry, unwanted to the touch.
the warmth of a lifetime of love, gone without a trace.

as i sense you leaving,
the feel a thousand waves crashing down on this sad soul overwhelms me.

my lungs compassed, gasping for air,
these lips unmoveable, incapable to make the slightest sound.
hands, unsteady, unable to reach for you as you slowly fade away.

this heart, perished.





Submitted on 2009-05-10 14:07:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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