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    dots Submission Name: motherless mothers day 5dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 423
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsmotherless mothers day 5dots
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    i can't stop this torment
    so hard i try
    smoothered deep within
    i can't breathe
    i want you here
    holding me close
    catching my tears
    kissing them from my cheeks
    your a million miles away
    where i can't touch
    laugh at my stupidity
    darkness
    your grin
    sick to my stomach
    you just don't care
    i want to let go
    just fade away
    into nothingness
    feeling whole
    thoughts of suicide
    creeping in
    i thought i won this war
    perhaps just a battle
    somebody...
    save me...




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