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    dots Submission Name: I am lostdots

    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       To be so crazy about someone...but so scared and embarrased to tell them beacuse you don't like yourself so you're afraid no one else can like you

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    dotsI am lostdots

    My skin is so heavy
    Atop my bones
    My body keeps sagging
    As age goes

    I am weak in the mirror
    A small waste of space
    I reach out to touch cold
    Glass of a face

    Anebreate my mind
    Only help to amplify
    This misery of self torture

    Every time i slip by
    A reflection of myself
    I stop stand still and stare
    Imagine ripping off my face

    I wake to cold mornings
    Lay a puddle of misery
    To go on is a sin
    Hands and knees cleaning
    The mess i made

    I hate this body
    Of flesh and of fat
    I wish to fall and feel nothing
    All that

    But i sit here
    And type
    write with my thoughts
    Ride in a line going nowhere
    No stops

    And i gasp for sweet air
    But my throat has been caught
    In a choking of fears
    To spill tears
    I will not

    Submitted on 2009-05-11 00:32:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i understand the struggle.

    self-confidence is a terrible thing to have introverted.

    the poem is a tear shed.

    perhaps coul be washed away.

    idk. just sayin, rough place.

    to go on is never a sin, but i might be missing the context. idk.


    that it's still with a like for someone.
    good luck.
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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