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    dots Submission Name: iandots

    Author: cha
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 37/28/31
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    People don't know exactly what it is about me
    They don't understand what I want to be
    Nobody knows the truth or why I do the things I do
    But one person does and that person is you

    You are the only person I know that is always by my side
    You helped me through hard times when I almost cried
    When I felt alone with out any hope
    You gave me a smile and the strength to cope

    You've been there for me more than I can say
    You're my guardian angel in your own special way
    You can take everything bad and turn it to good
    Just because if it was you, you know that I would

    If there ever was a shadow covering my light
    I could count on you to help me see right
    You're the only person who truly knows me
    You're the only person who respects what they see

    Submitted on 2009-05-11 11:58:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is refreshing. I admire the fact that you pull no punches, that's a rare thing. you know what you know.
    I have to admit, I was expecting a joke or some kind of backhanded ramble. that name, "Jesus", seems to bring out either the best or worst in people. for some reason.
    that said; I am taking a real chance here and am going to say you are expressing a faith in Jesus Christ, the God man of the Bible, not some hombre from south of the border who comforts you when you're feeling un poco azul. right?
    well if my hunch is correct, then, " You're my guardian angel in your own special way" is the one line I would take a closer look at. I don't know, maybe Jesus Himself doesn't mind and in that case maybe I shouldn't either, but... I don't know. "when I almost cried" felt a little off as I read it also, maybe shorten it up a little, just go for the tissue and let it all out, you know, drop the almost and cry your eyes out. it's ok.
    a little finesse here and there and you've got it.
    this is a real solid statement of your faith and like I said, refreshing. thanks.
    good job sis.
    | Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by solow | [ Reply to This ]

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