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    dots Submission Name: Burnt Blushdots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBurnt Blushdots
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    Open the door....
    I need to see your face

    To hear you crying softly
    in the silence of the bathroom.

    Talk to me....
    only I understand.

    you wear pain on your face
    like a terminal child

    Open the door....
    and show me your tears.

    the heat from your blood
    burns blush on your skin.

    Please hear my words
    through the thick of the door
    we'll try again
    the next baby will be born




    Submitted on 2009-05-11 16:56:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the vagueness of it, though im not sure if it means what i think it means but thats why i like it.
    I also like the tittle its really unique i've never thought of it that way.

    Buster
    | Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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