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    dots Submission Name: Wonderingdots
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    Author: LiChan
    ASL Info:    18/f/in my reality
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 9/6/12
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWonderingdots
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    Sitting in the glowing dark
    Your arrow has hit its mark
    I wonder if this is what you meant
    When you said revenge is sent

    I canít forget the lonesome night
    Where I wish I hadnít been right
    Sitting on my moonlit railing
    Watching as the clouds go sailing

    I sense the rift that is between us
    Like a wound filled with puss
    I can help but to ask out loud
    If you are in the crowd




    Submitted on 2009-05-12 12:11:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know how this feels, and it's not a very fun feeling. I thought you did an excellent job on this poem, and I also think that people will be able to relate.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2009-05-14 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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