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eve of the eternalist


Author: sickly
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Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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this is a recent work that i also have submitted to lulu.poetry for what it's worth.i know this site claims that it is a scam but there is some contraindication as in evidence to the contrary.however, as far as evidence of scammingliness, i was offered a publishing deal by poetry.com scam scam scam scam scam subsidiary, publishtoday.com, and despite all my mail and telephone efforts to reach someone about it, they did not follow it up, and it became impossible to reach any living person at either of the companies in question.the publishtoday.com staffer who was the presenter of the deal to me, based on an alleged conversation with poetry.com scam scam scam scam scam managing editor. howard ely, was named, russell hall.i almost reached him by phone once but he did not take my call nor return it.at a later time, again trying to reach him, i was informed coincidentally or mysteriously, that he was no longer a publishtoday.com employee.there's no harm to personally or artistically by continuing to submit to lulu.poetry.long live the queen, her majesty, elizabeth the second, defender of the faith.there's a glitch on the appearing copy of this one that does not appear on the edit copy, and am without the know how or resourses to rectify the problem at this time.


eve of the eternalist



forebody goes doing down new intro
a neverist, a core-hard hitlerite
only ever been one angel in hell
a hoax so slow you can't dope it
hells' heaven, high houston, heil!
it was did in id ibid by the r
m.p.
i.d. unit of id departmental affair
whoa!wait!don't wear out boy wonder
night of the cracked fright fear
fear of the fright cracked night
a casket carcass in a car case fact
that would be it in bloodless purge
ropes to loose screws become nooses
swing to handle snakes and ladders
the latter to lay siege upon town
mistake, mistook town, taken in mist
down england, englander, over, done
i so not, pix pox nix, tix tox not
extract from restrict on class file sekret
overthrow, underflow, takeover




Submitted on 2009-05-12 13:20:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow there are some really powerful words and images throughout however i have to be honest this piece loses me and im not sure your ideas are coming across as imagined...
| Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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