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    dots Submission Name: favorite sin...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 427
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1339



    Description:
       a night of drinking with a twist i didn't expect...


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    dotsfavorite sin...dots
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    drip, drop
    tears, blood
    spattered on the ground
    over come with the rush
    a shocked state of mind
    bruising, breaking
    closed fist
    my heart races
    like a hit of crack
    scarlet spray
    on the black river
    leading to safety
    a follower in the shadows
    too much pain to run
    screaming inside
    bones shatter
    feeling like a gunshot
    laying on the grass
    praying just take me
    begging, please stop
    can't handle your drink
    here i am
    a dog
    loyal and kicked
    a toy, your play thing
    forgotten sanity
    forgetful feelings
    againts my body
    slices the metal
    for once not a blade
    but a car door
    pinned, no escape
    eyes sealed shut
    whimpering
    pathetic
    but love takes it all
    all wounds heal with time
    speechless in the dark
    never alone, yet so far gone
    trapt...
    sorry never uttered
    just a stiff cock
    to prove the point
    a dry hump the next morning
    followed by hours of being licked
    shameful acts
    though well enjoyed
    my flame still glows
    a hatred deep within
    but sleep with the devil
    is my favorite sin...





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