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    dots Submission Name: Good Nightdots
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    Author: JonInk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 6/11/8
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 413
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 406



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       This is how I feel when it comes to my music. I played till the sun went down..


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    dotsGood Nightdots
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    The sun goes down,
    On the top of town.
    The colors blend,
    Two shadows mend.
    Art is everywhere and everything,
    Where a silent mind can sing.
    Beauty signifies a bright place,
    Where Harmony has a face.
    Music is where art has a heart,
    Passion delivers a beautiful start.
    When a soul breaks free,
    Into a world; I can now see.




    Submitted on 2009-05-12 21:44:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think the reason why it may seem incomplete is that each line is a short and different thought (though is may link back to a general theme). Maybe if they were expanded a bit more ...

    I really like this piece though, it could be interpreted in so many ways, as a result touch so many diff. ppl
    | Posted on 2009-05-13 00:00:00 | by Petals | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the words you have used and the idea however it doesnt feel complete or the idea is not fully expressed throughout. I feel that the ryhme is forced having said that i can be guilty of the same..
    | Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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