Quite a twist huh!? I say kudos to the people who could write with a hint of satire, okay maybe this was more than a hint but it kept me reading, then i read it again. there is a nice rhythm and when you get to the end it explains the little hints that were given before. it reminds me of the folk songs we sing at home (St. Vincent) not that happy though it can be sung happily and always has a twit in the end
Is it strange that this poem about death reminds me of a child nursery rhyme. It's shouldn't strike you as strange cuz the history of child nursery rhymes is rather grotesque, normally that describe deaths a lot worse than chocking on the pit of a cherry. Anyway, I like the use of repetition in this poem...I'm not goin to say that it makes the poem, I am goin to say that it sets up the story quite well...and is rather catchy. I suggest you find a illustrator and try to put this in print, who knows, You might be the next J.K. Rolling (is that how you spell that chicks name).
Submission Name: Cherry Cherry Oh My! Mary Mary
