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    dots Submission Name: Soldiers of our forgotten dots
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    Author: cor
    ASL Info:    16/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 28/24/30
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsSoldiers of our forgotten dots
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    For the Dispirited and the Desperate
    We march to the drum,
    of the silent and the numb
    our unending march,
    to those empty beats
    Though we are voiceless and cold,
    And Tempered through time
    Though we believe in nothing,
    but our own pledge
    we shall be the eternal,
    soldiers of our forgotten
    we've given our hearts,
    and sold our souls
    unable to leave behind violence,
    we dream the lost dream
    wandering through this world,
    we gain more of our militia
    to fight the undeserving remembered
    we express no question
    cause no more angst
    no more senseless pain
    remembrance we shall not seek
    understanding we wish not
    Only to march for our own
    to trust the lost kin

    for the dispirited and the desperate
    we march to the drum
    of the silent and the numb
    the undead army continues
    its campaign for the forgotten
    to end all this endless suffering
    for a false cause




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