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Author: sickly
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Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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this is my entry in the lulu.poetry contest that has as the prize, $5, be the judge.can it win?i'll patiently await the result either way being that i win by daring!


dead and forgotten, rock bottomed
death disappears wishestly wildened
in undying photograph life sentence
i did a snafu screw you too night
bad and blue, hitleryouth alive too
electric heavy hard rock in asylum
bid to keep in energy and industry
still loving every minute of it
ticket to destination heartbreak
who wants to live forever loverboy?
the show must go on killer queen
my best friend, somebody to love
dressed to thrills in the night
animalize forever in crazy nights
midnight crystal knightix cruelty
revenge on day of the innocent
just the facts in the naked city
is that you almost human?
life in hand, all american man

Submitted on 2009-05-13 13:15:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i just read your comment on my poem "impossiblismix" made back on the 5th month of 2009.i've just gotten back to the site, and am preparing to submit new experiments.the title of my new next one is"funny on fire".i'll get back to you and check out your page.
| Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
  To be all together truthful...your style of writing is definitely an acquired taste. I'm not tryna make fun of you, just saying that in my honest opinion. I wouldn't give it $5.000. As for the actual contest. Well, that depends on the judges taste in poetry. I've seen slam poets with poetry that hundreds and thousands of people love lose in a poetry contest to a paper poet with an original style. So best of luck to you either way.

| Posted on 2009-05-13 00:00:00 | by red_summer | [ Reply to This ]

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