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    dots Submission Name: Ghostdots

    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 350
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    Oh beautiful Pain
    how I need you again
    ignite the razors touch
    to feel Alive
    a little slit
    like to watch it Gush
    fall to the floor
    Vacate my mind
    Enthralled in the rush
    Iíll do it Again
    Just one more
    And the world goes hushÖ

    But when itís done
    I will cry
    with the world waiting outside
    Donít get me wrong
    I donít wanna die
    just donít wanna be Alive
    And deep inside
    This world of mine
    A piece of me will die
    Maybe Iím fucked
    And so are you,
    at least I felt AliveÖ

    Than Iíll crawl
    into my lil hole
    adhering your Apathy
    and like a Pancreas
    when it burst
    than Maybe youíll see
    Iím just a waste
    of used up space
    Am I even here?
    Until you fall
    Wrenching your gut
    Swallowing that heart in fear;

    than youíll remember
    when youíre Slit
    released of all your agony
    than youíll think
    there mightíve been
    Nothing left to be
    Eclipsed in Pain
    No right-No wrong
    lusting for relief

    Only than
    forging now
    might you know
    what it is to be

    In so much pain
    youíd have such rage
    if only you
    had the energy
    In a world
    but not of it
    Pleading for release
    of inexhaustible Agony

    Than perhaps maybe
    youíll know
    just for a day
    what its like
    in a world
    ignoring your decay

    just like me
    deep inside
    A part of you died
    but when you rise
    back to your world
    you wonít cryÖ

    Embraced in love
    friends and family
    youíll feel Alive
    lushing in morphine
    because of the slit
    that beautiful pain
    like a razor
    ignited your empathy

    for a split second
    before you forget
    what its like
    in this everyday world for me.
    And like a surgeon
    After I release the pain
    Iíll stop the blood
    Lying my razor down
    but itís my life
    and come tomorrow
    Iíll do my ďjobĒ
    drowning out the sound
    of a million voices
    that know of me not
    Another ghost of the world
    that nobody ever forgot.

    Submitted on 2009-05-13 16:12:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem is pretty wicked. I dig it. I think the Ghost metaphore is going really nice in this.

    | Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. kind of disturbing but it really caught my attention. it made me feel a little uneasy but you got your point across. you kind of left me at a loss of words becuase by your title i was expecting something way different. but i understand why you chose to give it that title. i cant say i liked it becuase it kinda creeped me out but i definatly wont forget it. nice work.
    | Posted on 2009-05-14 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]

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