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    dots Submission Name: When the Rain Clearsdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhen the Rain Clearsdots
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    Eyes soft like rain
    Welcoming yet a spirited jury
    Quick comes their spite
    Yet soon fades said fury

    The most beautiful eyes I dare stare
    In all of my time, at least in this fool's mind
    But I know one fact not bias
    They were the darkest; prettier, I find

    The two orbs helped make such looks
    Countless emotions touched my heart
    Of passion, desire, and hate and hurt
    And such power they had made me a part

    A glare was overload
    A simple glance would suffice
    The longer your stare the more of you I felt
    Yet empathy is not a vice

    Without a word I felt you
    All of your emotions would arise
    Gestures posed it no makeup
    Oh how I miss those beautiful eyes




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