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    dots Submission Name: Traffic dots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 630
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1504



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    These girls
    Young with cute curls
    So ignorant
    They just canít
    See
    How evil works

    It doesnít bypass the chickadee
    Why donít they see?
    How dressing up
    Can make one be so corrupt
    How putting yourself out there
    Makes one as vulnerable as white hare

    These girls
    With their pure white pearls
    Leave with out permission
    Unaware of the condition
    Of otherís ammunition

    They get taken
    Forsaken
    By loved ones
    Mistaken
    For whores and human sex stores

    They pick them up off the street
    Offering them a treat
    Of freedom
    Only to find
    That the reason they were so kind
    Was not true kindness at all
    Something that most appall

    Sold off like slaves
    And no one will save
    A girl that was taken away

    Strumpets
    Itís not their fault
    No one will halt
    This traffic mess
    No one will confess
    That
    These men that assault
    Suppress
    What they do
    All their taboo
    It is far from untrue
    A savior is overdue

    Traffic jam
    That lies beneath the damned
    Human traffic
    Horribly graphic
    Utterly sick
    With all the ties and trick

    Make it stop
    Make it stop








    Submitted on 2009-05-14 12:05:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      god i could feel this. it made me cry. i have been used like that. by supposedly grown men. this spoke. this was real.
    | Posted on 2009-05-14 00:00:00 | by divineevilness | [ Reply to This ]


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