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    dots Submission Name: Heaven Fallsdots
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    Author: divineevilness
    Elite Ratio:    0.63 - 10/7/6
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       i wrote this when my daughter died


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    Tears leaking from the corners of my eyes.
    A falling into nothing.
    A heart beat.
    A pulse.
    And heaven falls.
    The life growing inside.
    A stranger.
    A hole.
    Forever imbedded in my heart.
    A heart beats breath away.
    Silence as the cold creeps in.
    And heaven falls.
    Looking to the skies.
    Trying to find the lies.
    Falling to my knees.
    All lies. Desperate and alone.
    As heaven falls.
    Blood drips from the now black sky.
    Time stands still.
    Swallowing the bile back.
    Watching as heaven falls.
    A heart beat.
    A final breath.
    Silent screams of the dead.
    I watch as you pass from this life to the next.
    My heaven fell.




    Submitted on 2009-05-14 15:27:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well it's good actually i can relate
    | Posted on 2009-05-15 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]


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