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    dots Submission Name: meaningless paindots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsmeaningless paindots
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    questions unanswered
    words without meaning
    thoughts unfinshed
    soulution...bleeding

    hurtful truths surfaced
    pain beatin in
    brusies for show
    life lived in sin

    taken whats not given
    fights you provoked
    heartless and carless
    loveless words you spoke

    lifeless but living
    absent but here
    truthfully lying
    message made clear

    harm you conficlted
    taken without permission
    scars as reminders
    beaten into submisson





    Submitted on 2009-05-14 15:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow! that was a very strong written poem and the stanza's were great too. I really liked this poem but I hope your okay too. Love ya long time ):
    | Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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