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come get me

Author: joezwells
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64 /79 /55
Words: 139
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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come get me

looking in your eyes
my hearts frozen in time
light leaking through me
amazed that your mine

smiles i cant hide
the warmth i feel inside
days are too short
spending with you, theres not enough time

you make me so happy
i love to dream of you
trying to express what i feel
no matter what i do, you still have no clue

i tell you everything
and you listen so well
you said you'd always be there
and on this thought i dwell

im scared to let you in
but even more afraid if i dont
i dont want you to go
with every word said, i know you wont

so come get me baby
im not going anywhere
i feel like im floating
so come pull me near

Submitted on 2009-05-14 16:50:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aww this is adorable i believe its the first post i've read from you that wasn't depressing or lonely this is nice .... its good to go out of your confurt zone and write things you normally wouldn't. Out of all 110 posts of mine i believe 5 of them give or take a few are "Love" related... nevertheless this is very nice!

| Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  O...M...G...WOW that was awesome I still can't believe that my bfffl just wrote a love poem about a boy. Do you realize that you love him? That poem says everything to me and you finally let someone in, thats crazy, but awesome.
Love ya
| Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

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