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    dots Submission Name: Nightfalldots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       some midnight ramblings,,,, after a long period of non-writing


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    dotsNightfalldots
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    And finally, against the storm,
    The heartbeat of obscurity
    Is caught by the most sensitive
    of telescopes -
    Same as feet, which melt into the floor -
    Their ache that never goes
    Subliming into chords of sunlight.

    Or was it moonlight? A silent fight
    For the insomnia-driven eye,
    Its vessels drenched into the pillow
    To blink away the haunting image.

    Itís a torture, racing against the space age,
    The terrorizing angels, their sweet heads,
    The smile and extended hands
    Angled for our perish.

    A mist of colors is distraught,
    Canít find its way into the dust,
    Just like a lamp against the midnight window -

    So indecisive if itís in or out.






    Submitted on 2009-05-15 12:02:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel drawn to comment upon this even though what i'll say here will ultimately prove to be mostly indecisive ramblings in return.

    surreal in texture, i think this stretches the boundaries
    of senses in literature... almost too much so if i can be completely honest.

    almost in that way where the connections
    could possibly be threaded together
    a bit more tightly so that this madness
    has more of a focus.












    i read this again.
    because i had to.
    because there's something ultimately primal,
    this energy you expend in seeming disconnection.

    but maybe that's where it's at for me:
    a kaleidoscope of silent colour.
    yet bursting with silver and green.

    i taste colours.
    is that strange?
    | Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, use or lose and forgive my tampering with the words... but if you like anything keep it.

    And finally, against the storm,
    The heartbeat of obscurity
    Is caught by the most sensitive
    of telescopes -
    Like as to feet, which melt into the floor -
    Their ache that never goes
    Subliming into chords that were sunlight.

    Or was it moonlight? A silent fight
    For the insomnia-driven eye,
    Its vessels drenched into the pillow
    To blink away the haunting noon.

    Itís a torture, racing against the space age,
    The terrorizing angels, their sweet heads,
    The smile and extended hands
    Angled for our perish.

    A mist of colors is distraught,
    Canít find its way into the dust,
    Like as the lamp against the midnight window -

    So indecisive if itís in or out.

    -------------------------

    and i really enjoyed this, quite elegant and searching.

    The images of the angels and the words about 'space age'

    had me thinking about a billboard of such angels that when we advanced to that place as a race we might only peek behind the cutout and find all our ruin before us.

    And that's strong i think, when you can relate it back to the individual.

    yup. I liked this one and then some.
    | Posted on 2009-05-15 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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