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    dots Submission Name: Yuri And Flames Adventure: The Mansion dots
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    Author: Vossler
    Elite Ratio:    0.7 - 0/1/8
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Story/Legend
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    Description:
       Its been a few years since the boys were teleported to Runescape only to find they have to be sent to an Orphanage like mansion will they make friends there? or will they be lonely? Yuri is 17 years old and Flame is 16 years old


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    dotsYuri And Flames Adventure: The Mansion dots
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    "The mansion is owned by Miss Alissa Jay" John said smiling taking off his top hat showing his long black hair and mutton chops "Well im off now ta-ta!" John said getting in the horse carrige "We should go" Yuri said nudging Flames arm "B-b-but ah nevermind!" Flame said "Hey mom and dad lived in an orphanage! so can we!" Yuri said "Yeah but that one was better!" Flame said drinking some water "At least were getting out of this castle" Yuri said getting his stuff packed for the mansion "Yeah you got a point" Flame said as they headed out the double doors to the mansion.




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